1. Wow! That is bad writing. I mean, I know I can't write, so it's a bit off to critique.... but, really...
2. The following paragraph is clear signal that the copywriter needs a woman. I know horny when I read it...
Now he’s laying my rod parallel to the water, tip pointing like ballplayer calling a homer, the looped bolt of line straightening in slow, unwavering motions and settling in that precise vicinity, settling like parachute silk on a long bubble of air.
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Date: 2009-02-27 03:39 am (UTC)2. The following paragraph is clear signal that the copywriter needs a woman. I know horny when I read it...
Now he’s laying my rod parallel to the water, tip pointing like ballplayer calling a homer, the looped bolt of line straightening in slow, unwavering motions and settling in that precise vicinity, settling like parachute silk on a long bubble of air.